PPPPPPPPFFFFFFFFFFFT, IT'S OC, NOT OOC.

OOC means out of character. OC means original character.

neh heh XD

WOOT COMIC!

haha, i've jsut realised that i have to finish MY comic by midnight tonight.

So i'll be working on it until then.

right now... i need to eat my dinner. THEN i'll be going to my room. THEN i'll be sorting out the comic and panicking on MSN to everybody XDD

wish me luck!

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itza look good. very good drawing of the knight/ninja's actions

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As far as firsts go, this is a dandy.

First off, cheers on picking so simple a story for your first attempt. A lot of comic artists bite off more than they can chew on their first shots, but your "dinosaur-chases-knight" narrative is very easy on the brain. That, by extension, makes it easy to read.

Now, your flow is great, for the most part. The top row is a beautiful thing, with regards to the way the action flows from forest to knight to dinosaur. This continues up until just after the bridge collapses -- after that, it seems like your mojo started to run low. The "hold up a finger and run" gag is stillborn when the camera is so far away, and the "cape caught in the door" gag comes across as a little forced when you devote two panels to it. Having so many of your backgrounds remain static for three or so panels while the character run though them, as with the top row, is a terrific way to convey action and build tension. When used for comedy, however, they can wear out their welcome in a heap of a hurry.

When it comes to coloring and panel composition, I think you're doing fine and will only improve with practice. Finding reference for common things, like trees, will improve the quality of the strip more than you can possibly realize. The panel with Ninja Knight and the Dinosaur falling off the crumbling bridge is the best of the bunch, and well-lit besides. Ninja Knight's design is solid and easy to follow. Basically, I see nothing that would limit the strip's ability to grow.

This is just me, but I feel it's a little much for one page. I'd turn the top row into an entire page, for instance. But this is where your own sense of pacing is paramount. If you want all this on one page, then goddammit, one page it is.

Conclusion: one small step, one giant leap. I look forward to seeing what you do next.

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This is cool! I really like your blending of colors, it looks really clean and natural.

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Thanks! I would have been making that mistake for a very long time if not for you.

It didn't make sense to me either. I never understood what the extra O was for... now it makes sense.

Thank you so much! A lot of what you said are things that I'd not have thought of, on my own, and therefore are HUGELY helpful.

As for the one page statement, YES! I totally agree it is a bit too much for one page, but my goal was to do it all in one page for the purpose having a single item to show people and hang on my wall. When I sketched out my thumbnails of the ideas, it was broken into three pages, so it impacted a lot of the pacing. And not all of it translated well. Namely the closing door.

It's funny that you mention my story's momentum loses strength after the bridge collapses, because when I was conceptually putting it together; everything up to that point was more or less just free thought, and then after the bridge I planned the rest out to bring it to a conclusion.

As for the finger joke, it was more or less an accident when I was drawing my thumbnails, and it made me laugh enough to leave it in. And now that you mention the two panels devoted to his cape being pulled, I'd always thought something wasn't right about it, but I couldn't figure out what, so I left it as it was. But you're absolutely right.

Again thank you for the analysis. No one that I've shown it to thus far has been able to give the specific story construction criticism that you have. And I needed it.

Hey, no sweat. Having it all on one page was a good idea after all, when you put it that way. And again, I hope you do a Ninja Knight Comic .02 lickety split.

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Face it, you're going to read my comic. [link]

It's lovely cartoon. Maybe you should draw more detail about how the T-rex jumps back from the
abyss. I'm also confused what happened at the end. How can he escape from the T-rex at the gate? What are waiting in the castle?. And above all, why does he say 'WHY?" ?

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